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Walking the line By xXItzOliverXx Completed

(Book 1)
Beatrice eaton was once the small girl from abnegation. Now, two years after, she trains the transfers. What happens when she meets the young abnegation boy, son of the prior family? (Tobias and tris swaps positions)

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Great idea! But what made you think of it? Anyway I love it!
puremalum puremalum Mar 02
                              Awesome chapter! I like that you're having them switch personalities as well as roles, you know? I think it's cool. 
                              The only problems were the same ones as last time. 
                              That's all!
justdarcy justdarcy Jan 22
                              I think the suspense is really good for your story. I like the plot but sometimes it can be confusing😂 and when Marcus came (I know a lot of ppl have done this to Tobias) I kinda wonder if they just let him in or what? But overall love it
divergentpll divergentpll Aug 31, 2016
Something new, I like it. Quick question: he's a 2 years younger yes? Which I don't have a problem with cause my sister dates someone younger and my mom is older then my dad but just to clear things out
This is quite the cluster of "I did this" and "I did that." Maybe find a way to reword some of these paragraphs so that there aren't so many I's.
                              I like your opening. The old alarm clock scenario really fits the setting. That said, I'd suggest spacing out your paragraphs, and capitalizing Four's name.