Persuading a tomboy to fall in love..
you don't just flucking tell a homeless person to get away from you. saying please doesn't make it sound any nicer. i know you're probably trying to show jess and her personality but i would tell her to 'go and get some f'ing manners please and if you don't i will punch you'.
just saying, but if she was born in china, her sister probably wouldn't be called lily nor would she be called jess. but it would make sense if they changed their names or something