Uncontrollable

Uncontrollable

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🌻 F L O W E R 🌻 By XxRiah916Xx Updated Sep 17

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"You son of a bîtch! What did you do to me?!"

The shackles that were clamped tightly around my wrist, created red marks, drawing a small amount of blood as I pulled, tugged, and twisted on them.

He tsked, shaking his head as if scolding a child. But that's the thing, that's what I am, just a child, a teen at that.

"Oh, sweetheart! You think this is my doing?" He grins sickly, before laughing, one that sent my insides in a churning frenzy.

I sneered up at him, my kneeling position taking its toll on my neck after being craned up for so long.

"Don't believe me?" He arched a thick brow, shrugging his shoulders. "See for yourself."

My once normal life, I always thought I would somehow get back, not much but just a small fraction of it- finally crumpled the moment I locked gazes on the person in the mirror.

I only did one thing. . . It was buried deep within my chest, crawling its way up my throat and before I knew it, out my mouth.

I screamed.

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  Scarlett Wright, sixteen years old, parentless and alone taking care of her five-year-old brother when out of nowhere she suddenly burst into flames.

  She's frightened, scared and doesn't know what to do. This isn't the first time it has happened though, it was also the day her parents were murdered but this catches the attention of a person, lurking in the shadows, who were, and still are watching her and the every move she makes. Suddenly there's a series of knocks at her door in the dead of night. Taken from her home and thrown into a world she always thought didn't exist, people are out to get her and use her powers for evil.

The world has a lot in store for little olé Scarlett, starting with secrets.

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xSnowFallx xSnowFallx May 08
Sorry if I'm being rude but I'm guessing you meant, "Why am I not burning?" 
                              
                              Okay I'll stop now. Sorry.
This is one of the best openings I have ever read. It is chilling and heart wrenching. The imagery is really great too, even though you don't say if they are in a room (adding to the mystery) it's like I know exactly what her surroundings are from what you have included. Really great work!
The flash back dialogue is awesome! At first I was confused but the way you spaced it is perfect.
- - Jul 27
First chapter and I'm already hooked. This is so wonderfully written, I can't wait to read the rest 😊
Flashing refers to light not sound maybe try the snap or crackle of lightening striking an object.. just a thought. :)
Maybe try 'wish I had listened to my mother.' It reads nicer.