ʙᴀᴅ ʙᴏʏ ↠ ʙ.ʙʜ

ʙᴀᴅ ʙᴏʏ ↠ ʙ.ʙʜ

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#NOTTODAY By taeeehyunggg Updated Jan 09

ʟᴏᴠᴇ ᴄʜᴀɴɢᴇs ᴏɴᴇ, ʙᴇʟɪᴇᴠᴇ ɪᴛ ᴏʀ ɴᴏᴛ.

ʙᴀᴅ ʙᴏʏ ᴛᴏ ᴀ ɢᴏᴏᴅ ɢᴜʏ ᴅᴏᴇsɴ'ᴛ sᴏᴜɴᴅ sᴏ ʙᴀᴅ, ʀɪɢʜᴛ?


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ChocoMalt ChocoMalt Aug 22, 2016
I think this captures the reader. It's a strange start. Something unexpected. "MY" MOTHER ON "YOUR" DOOR. To me, that's strange so it stands out.
clefybaek clefybaek Dec 06, 2016
"Living with HIM" him him him him him, him. Living. With. Him.🙊
ChocoMalt ChocoMalt Aug 22, 2016
There are some awkward sentences but the way you write is really interesting.
SantosPhillipCarlo SantosPhillipCarlo Dec 05, 2016
I'm chuckling reading this because in my estimation, Baekhyun is flipping back and forth between the good boy and bad boy sides of him but doing a cool job of it. Thanks for this one!
ChocoMalt ChocoMalt Aug 22, 2016
Your writing improved from the last chapter! This one definitely flows better! Nice!
ChocoMalt ChocoMalt Aug 22, 2016
It's great that you're varying the structure, but you might want to check for flow. Does it read well when you word it this way? Otherwise, the content itself is very good. 
                              
                              Her family is so mean.