Abused (NaLu/Fairy Tail Fanfic)

Abused (NaLu/Fairy Tail Fanfic)

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Drama Queen By EsraaTolba Updated Nov 30, 2016

*doki*

What is that?

*doki*

What is that feeling?

*doki*

The way I feel right now. . . Is weird. . . It's different.

*doki*

The way I feel around her is different.

*doki*

Why do I find it hard to breath all of a sudden?

*doki*

Her giggle, her smile, it makes me. . . Want to smile too.

*doki*

Her touch, her scent, her voice, it makes my heart dance.

*doki*

Why does she makes me feel that way?

*doki*


Those were Natsu's feelings towards Lucy, but does Lucy feel the same?


[ Warning: this story contains strong language, extreme violence, slight lemons, and some depressing thoughts so read at your own risk. ]

Queen_Mirajane Queen_Mirajane a day ago
aWh you need to have more confidence in your writing T_T 
                              I'm not the best writer either but you're way better than me tbh
Lexgal111 Lexgal111 a day ago
The entire paragraph was one sentence. Hey just a tip: turn more than half of those commas into periods.
AlexCastro1212 AlexCastro1212 Aug 13, 2016
Meh gramer suks 2, just kidding, but seriously my grammar does suck, but more people catch on what you saying by reading the text around it
Lexgal111 Lexgal111 a day ago
Anybody else read grammar as Grandma. No? Just me? Okay... gomen for mentioning it....
AdenShep AdenShep Jan 05
That whole paragraph made me think of the song 'for the love of a daughter ' by demo lavoto
xXnalu_fanXx xXnalu_fanXx Nov 28, 2016
To me your grammar is fine. You might find me commenting in some chapters just for tips or fixing mistakes. Its just a natural instinct to me. Anyways, i was just going to say cut back a little on the commas. I'm noticing a lot in some paragraphs.