Charisk.. Very Intimate Charisk... Maybe Some Sad Parts.. Shhh
* Is done reading this part.. falls over with nose bleeding but is also laughing * YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS SOOOO MUCH SIN >/////////////////////<
Probably listening to his theme, eh?
He's a douche ain't he?
This comma is unnecesary, I noticed more previously, after " or ' you don't need anything (besides a new line of text.)
Only before the second do you need a dot, question mark or exclamation mark.
* You feel your Sans crawling on you back...
* You question whether you're imagining this or if Sans is actually judging you for being a dirty Charisk sinner.
* Either way, it's not very fun.
Especially having an inventory full of Charisk... lewds...
Your writing is a 8/9
You only don't know where commas go and sometimes make too large or too small paragraphs.
Improve on this and become a great writer!
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