* You Are Filled With Intimacy!

* You Are Filled With Intimacy!

37.6K Reads 593 Votes 14 Part Story
FUCKING NORMIES By HpptyHopItsFUCK Updated Apr 21

Charisk.. Very Intimate Charisk... Maybe Some Sad Parts.. Shhh

  • charisk
  • charisksmut
  • fluff
  • lemon
* Is done reading this part.. falls over with nose bleeding but is also laughing * YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS SOOOO MUCH SIN >/////////////////////<
Jyth_Mivena Jyth_Mivena May 02
Probably listening to his theme, eh?
                              He's a douche ain't he?
Jyth_Mivena Jyth_Mivena May 02
This comma is unnecesary, I noticed more previously, after " or ' you don't need anything (besides a new line of text.)
                              Only before the second do you need a dot, question mark or exclamation mark.
* You feel your Sans crawling on you back...
                              
                              * You question whether you're imagining this or if Sans is actually judging you for being a dirty Charisk sinner.
                              
                              * Either way, it's not very fun.
                              
                              
                              
                              
                              
                              Especially having an inventory full of Charisk... lewds...
Jyth_Mivena Jyth_Mivena May 02
Your writing is a 8/9
                              You only don't know where commas go and sometimes make too large or too small paragraphs.
                              
                              Improve on this and become a great writer!
getout_avi getout_avi May 04
I CAME DOWN HERE TO MENTION GORILLAZ AS SON AS I SAW IT I SCROLLED DOWN TO THE COMMENTA