It was never supposed to be about making love, it was about sex. It wasn't about feelings, just feeling; touch. Taste. It didn't have to hurt, it didn't have to significant, it didn't need to be named. Fucking, not loving.
But it wasn't.
So I was just looking at different books on wattpad and i came across an intro for a book that was the exact one that yiu have for this book. The "author" is Gavinbotha
It doesn't bode well for the author that this book showed up right next to a book on the featured list with the exact same description and characters...that was finished two years ago.
I really hope you make it big because you're writing is phenomenal...I actually look to you for inspiration.
Dialogue is always a new paragraph unless its the same person speaking.
you need to use paragraphs but other then that, it's great :)
Oh my god! I am having a crazy fan girl moment, but the description for your story is so good, and so is this first chapter. I love your writing style, it is very edgy.