Adeline (Watty Awards Finalist 2013)

Adeline (Watty Awards Finalist 2013)

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Sasha By sasha_94 Completed

Adeline St. Clair, afraid that her father's desperate attempts for money might sully her any more than they already have, stows away aboard the notorious Poseidon's Curse ran by the treacherous pirate Flynn. Flynn Gaige, tired of living with what he considers a deformity, sets sail on the most dangerous voyage yet in search for a cure of his abnormality. How does the brutal pirate fare when he discovers an accident prone girl aboard his ship?  Follow Adeline on her quest for freedom, love, and quenching her desire for adventure.

Too many sentences start with I. Try mixing up sentence structure. Otherwise, good start.
This story is so captivating! The conflicts and the characters are amazing!
- - Jan 03
hmm, fast paced beginning. I'm glad you got right to it. I hate reading through super long monologues or whatever you call them that I just skip over, and then end up getting confused about later.
PefectPurity PefectPurity Aug 18, 2015
@wonderland0215 not to be rude but her brother didn't did he left for war
LarryEqualsTrueLove LarryEqualsTrueLove Apr 21, 2015
Now that's the way you start a book .. You've got me hooked already !! It annoys me when I start a book and the first couple chapters are filled with needless crap that really could've. Been left out without hurting the storyline in  the least..
evesalaz29 evesalaz29 Aug 24, 2014
I really love the way its developing. I am very excited about this.  Only comment is that she left so early. The first chapter and she already ran away. I don't know. Just a thought.