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Prince Of Wolves

Prince Of Wolves

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Butterfly Kisses By Simplicitystars Updated 2 days ago

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        To love a beast is to love the flaws stitching your heart together.
        Tristan Mullen is the most eligible bachelor in his small town. He has everything his heart desires, wealth from his parents, women at the edge of his feet. Though, none of it satisfies the empty void lingering in the deepest parts of his hollow heart. 
          Tristan was never a knight in shining armor, but self-centered, and shrouded by darkness, desperately seeking his parent's attention. When he breaks the wrong girl's heart, she curses him to the moon. That night, she changes him into a deadly monster humans fear to face. 
          A werewolf.
          Years have passed by, and Tristan's has become accustomed to the moon tormenting him when it peaks over the horizon, burning behind shallow clouds.  Until he stumbles across Hayden Bell. A benevolent shy woman trapped in an abusive relationship. His curiosity grows for her with each encounter,  making him crave more.  
          But his infatuation comes with a price. Not only does he risk exposing his deadly secret,  but also puts Hayden in grave danger from her abusive boyfriend, and the werewolf.

This is good, but the first sentence sounds odd. What are you trying to say? Is she trying to make out what's out there? She can't see clearly because of the pouring rain? Is that it? I'd try to change it up a bit, so it's a stronger start.
I'm going to check out the changes you've made. Just don't unpublish it again for fixes before I catch up.
Apollyon666 Apollyon666 May 16
Love that it isn't just about any relationship, but a healthy one.
Yes, here. This is really good, so I'd say go with the way they look at her.
Apheon Apheon Jun 02
Bring it on! You're talking to a 13 year old who read Fifty Shades of Gray and watched 2 girls 1 cup while eating! (And didn't throw up)
I've noticed the word drowning used at least three times since I started reading. I think you could find a substitute word for it so it reads better. I'm a repetition nazi if it's possible to find a better option, I'd always go with it.