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I Am The Absorber

I Am The Absorber

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Scott By mylifeisaverage Updated Nov 29, 2011

A young boy discovers his amazing ability, the power to absorb objects into his body. Now, five years after running away from all he knows, he must run once again to save a girl from those who wish to use her for their own purposes.

I like this writing style: it has just enough detail but flows nicely from one event to the next. Kudos to you!
2writer 2writer Feb 01, 2014
This is really amazing! The ending was great and I will definitely read on! I love the way you describe the coughing up of the person, and I love the idea! Nice job!
annie1loves1you annie1loves1you Jun 03, 2013
I really like this! Oh, but near the end of it, when the boy is throwing up, you put:
                              ...and a tiny bit of yellow stuff. then a....
                              Did you mean, yellow stuff, then a? This is really good, I like how you write. You have a natural talent for it! Keep up the good writing!
liambeerens liambeerens Mar 22, 2013
This is a very nice beginning. I was hooked from the beginning, great job. Stick to this because you are a natural
- - Jul 05, 2012
Wow..I loved the creaky ending!! It was very different yet in a good way. Your grammar and puntuction was very on point and sharp while your description was well. I loved how everything flowed together to make the grand cliffhanger...
lightningheart96 lightningheart96 Apr 11, 2012
That's really really cool. I like the way he speaks and love the way he manages things. The idea is creative and awesome. I especially love the cliffhanger. Very interesting. That's pretty intense there.