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My Deceiver. ||Ziam AU #Wattys2016

My Deceiver. ||Ziam AU #Wattys2016

2.6K Reads 541 Votes 28 Part Story
Cherribell🍒 By Cherribellnat Updated Jan 22

"How do except me to look at you the same!"

- Being vulnerable and opening up to people is a difficult thing this day in age. I thought I was crazy finding piece by piece of a puzzle I didn't even know existed. The ride was so fun going up...

And his deceiving ways made me come crashing down. -Zayn Mailk in My Deceiver

                              Wow, 1D gone bad! Very captivating from the very start, so well done. However, at times the grammatical errors did distract from your story, but nothing that can't be easily edited.
Hey! I'm your partner this week! My story that you're assigned is also my first so don't worry about this not being wattys material. Fanfiction is also a good way to get started!
paviya_blue paviya_blue Jan 16
Oooh is this 1D mixed with 5SOS? Awesome!  This is a great start to the story;  very suspenseful and entertaining.  There were a few grammatical errors here and there but nothing too catastrophic.  Keep up the good work 👌
I noticed in comments above me the biggest the problem is grammar, but I like bad A** Liam
pedolecki pedolecki Jan 14
You do action well but there are a few grammar errors with misspell long but other then that everything seems fine.
badassgirly badassgirly Jan 18
There are a few grammatical errors. I suggest going back and fixing them. Some of the sentences are a bit confusing and need to be reworded as well. Other than that, good start to the story