Blackwood Academy and the Mitchell Family

Blackwood Academy and the Mitchell Family

11 Part Story 630 Reads 5 Votes
Paisley Myra By basketballbabe17 Updated Dec 17, 2011

Sasha Bennett is searching for that perfect private high school in New York City. The problem is the perfect school is in Philadelphia. Her parents want her to stay in New York City, but she needs to convince them otherwise. Turns out, her parents have family friends in Philadelphia and they said she could move in with them. Great solution, right? She arrives to find that they have NINE gorgeous, should be model, boys! Living with them shouldn’t be hard right?

@xXxBrokenStringsxXx  nahh its fine- when i write i tend to write a lot more dialouge cause thats the way i explainn everything...! so i'll try to go back and add some actual explanation when i have time! thanks!
@xXxBrokenStringsxXx  not quite sure exactly what you mean....but i'll see what i can do.....
MarineLynn MarineLynn Dec 05, 2011 02:43AM
@basketballbabe17 In writing, no matter where the "good" part is, treat everything good. My last advice is to always broaden each subject or your audience won't like it.
@xXxBrokenStringsxXx  where do you think it gets confusing? if you tell me maybe i can add more detail in those specific parts! cause it gets a little tricky when i read it cause i don't find anything confusing- i already know what the whole story's about! haha
@SuperFishieJunior well it was my way of moving onto the good part of the storyyy hahah:p i wanted the actual story to be about her life with the mitchells- not actually life in nyc with her parents and stuff!
@SuperFishieJunior sorryy i'm still not quite sure what you mean....like can you give me examples? i didn't see it as awkward but maybe once you point it out i'll see it?