The White Phoenix

The White Phoenix

25.3K Reads 911 Votes 10 Part Story
Francis Danelle Armentrout By francisarmentrout Completed

Harry Potter is an abused boy who lives in the cupboard under the stairs he is small for a 16 year old boy who had scars on his body from his uncle and words carved in to his hand and other places on his body but on his 17th birthday he would go in to a creature inheritance because his uncle want to far one night and it made the Phoenix tears react and change him in to a very rare White Phoenix and a submissive one at that so when he changed the Goblins came in to his room and took him to the Goblin bank were he learn he has been lied to his whole live and he also finds his Dominate mates in two red headed twins             
Read and find out what was hidden from him and how he settles in to his new life of being tooken care of and not having to protect other's any more

This was supposed to be a chapter and or paragraph but it's basically one sentence. These are what you should be using " . , ? ! '
HeyImLars HeyImLars Jun 15
Who ever wrote this needs to use ->. And "..."! I can't read this! I don't care if it's your first story! Use grammar! It's just like writing on paper!
This is going to give me a headache...
                              Please
                              Please
                              Please
                              Use some punctuation and spaces
                              And "..." when someone is talking 
                              It's too hard to me to read in this form 😔
                              Que desperdicio
HOW DO YOU MISSPELL DRACO?!?!?!? HIS NAME IS SAID THROUGHOUT THE BOOKS SO MUCH IT SHOULD BE EASY TO REMEMBER
Harry wasn't under the stairs in his sixth year he was in Dudley's second bedroom wasn't he?
WhiteFoxChild WhiteFoxChild Dec 18, 2016
This is good, but you really need to work on grammar, punctuation and things. It's hard to read, a little annoying especially when it seems everything is one sentence.