The White Phoenix

The White Phoenix

8.7K Reads 362 Votes 9 Part Story
Francis Danelle Armentrout By francisarmentrout Completed

Harry Potter is an abused boy who lives in the cupboard under the stairs he is small for a 16 year old boy who had scars on his body from his uncle and words carved in to his hand and other places on his body but on his 17th birthday he would go in to a creature inheritance because his uncle want to far one night and it made the Phoenix tears react and change him in to a very rare White Phoenix and a submissive one at that so when he changed the Goblins came in to his room and took him to the Goblin bank were he learn he has been lied to his whole live and he also finds his Dominate mates in two red headed twins             
Read and find out what was hidden from him and how he settles in to his new life of being tooken care of and not having to protect other's any more

Bracesgal13 Bracesgal13 Nov 21
I think its a great idea but it needs just a tad of tweaking.
Seriously  would love to read this, but It hurts my brain . Please have this beta'd or use spell check. Punctuation  is super important.
Great story but you just need some punctuation to help along with "these" so the reader can know who exactly is talking other than that I'm interested in your story.
BellaEmbrey BellaEmbrey Nov 25
Wouldn't it of been easier to say who was stealing instead of ot, cause it's just Percy, Ron, Ginny and Molly
35th3r 35th3r Nov 10
UMMMMMMMMMMMMM................................. plz can you add punctuation!
Is no one going to address the fact that the poor baby can't have kids and his name is         F-ing lord HANK