The Darkest Butterfly

The Darkest Butterfly

548 Reads 13 Votes 6 Part Story
Taylor By BaconBeast Updated Jan 27, 2011

Scarlett Villeda is just an average emo looking girl in school with few friends and a some what normal life. Until Caleb Santini drops into her life and things start to take a turn for the better. But will she get caught up in this dark angel's past? And when Ayden Conde starts to take a liking to her, will she fall for him instead or follow Caleb through a repeating journey in his dark past?

zellebelle zellebelle Dec 26, 2010
Kk. I'm agreeing with womanonthemoonlala. He is kinda girly sounding, and moving a bit fast, with the falling for her part... But I absoulutley loved the end where she flipped out on barbie:) maybe you should add a bit of their history and why they hate eachother so much? Just a suggestion:) <3
zellebelle zellebelle Dec 26, 2010
Kk. I'm agreeing with womanonthemoonlala. He is kinda girly sounding, and moving a bit fast, with the falling for her part... But I absoulutley loved the end where she flipped out on barbie:) maybe you should add a bit of their history and why they hate eachother so much? Just a suggestion:) <3
womanonthemoonlala womanonthemoonlala Dec 25, 2010
dude.quick advice.dont make the guy sound like a girl, try to write in more of a guy perspective, cuz he sounds like a girl..iloveyou though taylor(:
                              -Marcela V(:
BaconBeast BaconBeast Dec 20, 2010
@VampHime Haha shudder morgz... But thnx :P
                              Glad u gave an honest opinion :D
VampHime VampHime Dec 19, 2010
oh.my.god.
                              
                              LOL for ever.
                              
                              Who actually  says 'handsome' anymore?
                              But, damn, you made him sound FIT.