Devious Origins

Devious Origins

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Thad Phetteplace By protothad Updated Jun 19, 2016

She was definitely the most interesting woman Barry had met at Penbrooke College, but when she claimed to be a superhero, he realized she must be crazy.  Then again, maybe he was the one losing his mind, because the more time he spent with her, the less crazy she seemed.

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MonicaJohns3 MonicaJohns3 Jun 16, 2016
This paragraph kind of slows the action down. Maybe just limit it to "I was walking to my Theory of Computing lecture three days later, when my phone rang."
MonicaJohns3 MonicaJohns3 Jun 16, 2016
Maybe drop the PM, or use it for all the times you mention... Feels inconsistent with previous paragraph.