What Lies Beyond Smoke

What Lies Beyond Smoke

3.4K Reads 119 Votes 4 Part Story
Monsieur Burns By Benburns Completed

14 year old Caleb Goldswoode has an almost perfect life.
                       Until recently when he lost his beloved big sister to the hands of a tragedy that no one knows and his parents can't pull themselves to speak of.
  The ever so happy and innocent boy, seeking peace of mind takes up the habit of smoking and to his surprise...
  It makes no difference, well, atleast not to him
  But due to this new habit (Which he takes up for a different reason than simply feeling better due to intoxication) he starts to have hallucinations, seeing imaginary people and talking to a special stranger clad in black...only to find out the horrors of his new addiction and inevitably revealing secrets about his sister's life and death
  
  Join Caleb on his spine-tingling jorney in unraveling the secrets far beyond any human's comprehension and meet a whole new side of yourself that questions, what is right and what is wrong and experiences every emotion in between
  
  Because we're all human...seeking only one thing...a little Peace.

Nathassia Nathassia Jun 21
Try being betrayed by your bestfriend, and attempted to be killed by him.
-dontCARE-- -dontCARE-- Jul 11
If smoking was bad why do people do continue to do it. Life is too short
park_jihane park_jihane Jun 04, 2016
i heard it's +16 ehh and i haven't reached 16 but still this is exciting as hell ! LETS GOO CONTINUE READING IT  WOOHOO
- - Nov 12, 2016
Oh it's a boy. CUTE NAME!
                              
                              And I thought he was talking to himself. Your dialogue though.. interesting. It's going to confuse me 😂
- - Oct 29, 2016
Good start. Easy to follow and interesting. Has a lot of potential. Could be better if you did the following:
                              
                              Set the scene, describe the room
                              Describe the protagonist
                              Give more detail.