As They Fall [First Draft] ~ Currently Editing ~

Highest Ranking: #115 in Fantasy

The niece of a nobleman leading a double life.
The son of a blacksmith overlooked by those he loves most.
In a time of dragons, castles, thieves, bards, myths and legends. 
A tale of betrayal, love and sacrifice in a world where anything is possible.
   
This book is now finished yay! and I am working on a second draft ^_^

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charles
dagger
dragons
elizabeth
elves
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romance
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These two sentences come off as a little listy probably because they have the same structure.

 #believerbc
                              
                              Man, dat visual doe! 
                              
                              Your imagery is phenomenal, not just here but also throughout the entire chapter. You do a great job painting a picture and making the reader visualize what it is that your saying.
                              
                              Fabulous job here!

Oooh this book looks interesting I'm totally gonna read this! I love how it had a medieval fantasy genre, my fav!😃

I sort of don't buy that no one would ever see and recognize her. Maybe a mask would work better.

 #BelieverBc
                              First fantasy story I've read to the end, wow, this is really really nice. I love every bit of it.
                              But its kinda too long for a first episode...... But...you captured me already, so...I just read along. Nice job✌
                              
                              8/10

I'd almost like this to be described a little more. Is the box heavy? What does Tia look like?