As They Fall (Editing)

As They Fall (Editing)

6.3K Reads 675 Votes 38 Part Story
Erica E Emery By EricaEmery Completed

Highest Ranking: #115 in Fantasy

The niece of a nobleman leading a double life.
The son of a blacksmith overlooked by those he loves most.
In a time of dragons, castles, thieves, bards, myths and legends. 
A tale of betrayal, love and sacrifice in a world where anything is possible.
   
This book is now finished yay! and I am working on a second draft ^_^

  • adventure
  • amelia
  • arena
  • bard
  • blacksmith
  • charles
  • dagger
  • dragons
  • elizabeth
  • elves
  • fantasy
  • fight
  • kingdom
  • lord
  • medieval
  • noble
  • potion
  • romance
  • thief
  • wattys2016
VioletSun5 VioletSun5 Oct 31, 2017
These two sentences come off as a little listy probably because they have the same structure.
devinjacob devinjacob Jun 27, 2017
 #believerbc
                              
                              Man, dat visual doe! 
                              
                              Your imagery is phenomenal, not just here but also throughout the entire chapter. You do a great job painting a picture and making the reader visualize what it is that your saying.
                              
                              Fabulous job here!
AliCub_Heirofthevast AliCub_Heirofthevast Nov 09, 2017
Oooh this book looks interesting I'm totally gonna read this! I love how it had a medieval fantasy genre, my fav!😃
VioletSun5 VioletSun5 Oct 31, 2017
I sort of don't buy that no one would ever see and recognize her. Maybe a mask would work better.
Jey_Nathan Jey_Nathan Jun 23, 2017
 #BelieverBc
                              First fantasy story I've read to the end, wow, this is really really nice. I love every bit of it.
                              But its kinda too long for a first episode...... But...you captured me already, so...I just read along. Nice job✌
                              
                              8/10
VioletSun5 VioletSun5 Oct 31, 2017
I'd almost like this to be described a little more. Is the box heavy? What does Tia look like?