Story about a british girl that moved to america at a difficult time in her life. Then she meets boys from her new school that bring hell or happiness.
I really like the cover for this story (I quite like Avril).
good good :) i liked the british bit.
but just a little bit more descriptions, like say the place, a person's appearance etc. but overall, instant like :)
I like the fact that you didn't skim from the first class and then straight to lunch. I don't know how to explain it but i hope you know what i mean.
I think you nailed the British girl down what with the accent, pride and whatever. I strongly advise you to give her more background since British are obsessed with cleanliness and are neat freaks. Maybe you should add that. Otherwise, it's gr8.
Really good so far! Keep up the good work!!
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hey you could put her thoughts into italics so that it doesnt look like she's talking to other characters when she's not suppose to.