Trapped in your eyes

Trapped in your eyes

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kerry By pontweep1 Updated Nov 15, 2011

Kerry violet is a normal human girl. 
until she met a boy called danny. 
with his good looks and great personality, she wonders why hes always alone?
until she finds out his biggest secret??

lovelifecostheres1d lovelifecostheres1d Dec 06, 2011
i do like this story and would read - a bit of advice i would give is vary the sentance length.
                              it goes short - short- short- short - big paragraoh - short - short - short which  kinds of lacks emphasis of which short sentanes give, howeer dont be discouraged it is good