Jennifer is 18 and overweight, she became this way when her parents fought, She goes to Durwood high where Joel is captain of the football team, one night, there is a drinking game and she is the target.
My school was so different every class room was a different color and we painted our lockers the color we wanted.
Wtf she is not fat!!!! Gosh by the way the author was describing her was like 300 lb!!!
Girl I weigh 104 pounds and I don't have a a big belly you look beautiful so shut up and be proud
I weigh so much more then her and im only 14. She is probably supper pretty
Nothing is wrong with your writing. I love it and I love your story!
Your writing is very good so far, I like the story line. The only thing I can see is misspelled words here and there. Also there are a few different sentences that could be reworded. Keep up the AwEsOmE job!! 😊