the way she spent her summer book 1 : at camp , month 1

the way she spent her summer book 1 : at camp , month 1

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LSMaccabi By LSMaccabi Updated Nov 26, 2011

Chloe Brooke’s is stunning with chest length black curls and a soft heart shaped face with color changing hazel eyes. She only sees herself as average; she only has one flaw, her weight. She is tiny boned and her stomach is puffed, she hates herself. She thinks she is ugly. And no matter how many times people remind her of her exotic beauty, she just can’t see it. When she falls for a guy named Cameron marks, which falls for her friend Nicole Steinberg, and it’s all a jumbled mess .then the next month. You know what I’ll save you the end

  • birthday
  • camp
  • chloe
  • dance
  • dating
  • eating
  • fireworks
  • girl
  • hair
  • hanging
  • happy
  • hfl
  • houston
  • jealousy
  • kidnapped
  • kissed
  • love
  • mark
  • marriage
  • new
  • nicole
  • note
  • out
  • predating
  • problem
  • sad
  • skiing
  • sleeping
  • smile
  • summer
  • tragidy
iDreamBigTyme iDreamBigTyme Nov 23, 2011
@lironmenahem You're welcome and I'm really not trying to sound like a jerk. I'm trying to help
iDreamBigTyme iDreamBigTyme Nov 23, 2011
Okay, I really like the plot and the conception of the story but I do have some critism to......say?
                              
                              You don't really capitlize you're letters so it makes it kind of hard to read and you start sentences with and.
                              
                              You repeat words a lot like she and it.
                              
                              Other than that it has an amazing concept :D