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Star Bound

Star Bound

47.1K Reads 3.9K Votes 43 Part Story
K. S. Watts By KayeSwiss Completed

After working her fingers to the bone with overtime, breaking up with a cheating boyfriend, and being dragged out to the bar by her best friend to "get back out there," all Scarlett wants is to go home to eat ice cream and binge on chick flicks. And once she's met her best friend's post-breakup alcohol quota, she decides to do just that. 

Too bad she never makes it home.

Abducted on the streets, Scarlett is sold in a human trafficking ring. Never one to play damsel in distress, she is determined to get back home - except home is now light years away. Surrounded by danger and betrayal, in a foreign galaxy, friendless, and unarmed her chances of escape are almost nonexistent.

She should have just stayed home with the ice cream.

      **This is a first draft of the story. The draft is complete. Editing is not.
  Credit for the cover goes to @MoreBooksMoreJoy

I like your MC so far. She doesn't nag around about how her life sucks, instead she sets this vibe of getting revenge. I feel like her feelings were portrayed really well. 
                              This chapter drew me in from the start, and I can't wait to see more of this story.
EBJosef EBJosef Jul 06, 2016
A very nice open. It's very clearly written with an intriguing premise and a powerful emotional thrust. There is a small typo in your opening paragraph, you have I"m instead of I'M. Other than that, extremely well written!
JesseSprague JesseSprague Jul 09, 2016
Fun little manifesto style is probably the wrong word. But I find weird things fun. Sounds like this will shape up to be a dark and bloody story. Totally my cup of tea :)
sellersjr sellersjr Jul 11, 2016
A very good start with proper intrigue and promise of more to come 8)
Sh_x_dow Sh_x_dow Nov 03, 2016
I like the character's voice in this chapter. It is very compelling. However, it would be also cool if you can add a small part of your story in, so that it is more exciting.
JenniferEmbers JenniferEmbers Nov 30, 2016
I love this intro! Your protagonist seems like a really strong female character. I love those! I love that she is determined to make her abusers pay and she isn't just being weak and accepting what has been done to her. She isn't letting herself be a victim, she is searching for vengeance :)