Star Born | Previously Featured

Star Born | Previously Featured

7.2K Reads 427 Votes 5 Part Story
✨ Tia Hu ✨ By pendustblue Completed

Fallen stars never stay on earth. 

Such is the case of sixteen-year-old Carmen Esmaier, citizen of planet Terra and daughter of two of its most revered heroes. Shielded by her vigilante of an aunt since her parents' deaths, Carmen doesn't dare mention her dream of following in their footsteps and joining the army. 

But that all changes when a team of scouts arrives at the colony to host a contest, the prize being a coveted position in the army. For Carmen, that doesn't just mean soldiership and escape from her aunt, but a chance to work with Casper Conduir, her childhood hero...and perhaps something more than that.

It doesn't matter that she'll have to navigate a jungle of carnivorous trees and the discrimination of half the colony just to get to the contest. It doesn't matter that she arrives an hour late, nor that she has no weapon. 

After all, she just needs to fight for her happily ever after, and it'll come...right?


Cover by @Homely8

Nozrac Nozrac Jul 15, 2017
Carnivorous foliage, man eating flying frogs and sexist burnt-out mechanics looking to rip people off. Hell-of-a-universe you have here. Sublimely described in flowing, sifting phrases that snared me. (:-D)
Nozrac Nozrac Jul 15, 2017
Love how you materialized your world within my mind. An epic introduction to your universe. The girl's initial state of mind is out of the way the story can just burst free from here! Amazing! 😂
katelynmckelle katelynmckelle Jul 26, 2016
I love stories with strong female leads, though, I might be a bit biased since that is what I write. :) Keep up the good work!
CelestriaUniverse CelestriaUniverse Oct 05, 2016
Nice once again. A little more of the driving could have been used for pacing reasons but good prose nonetheless. 
                              Celestria - Journey Ever Onwards
StanjoNagasaki StanjoNagasaki Jul 21, 2016
Already you can tell that the main character will be a powerful figure in this narrative. I hope she defies everyone who dares to belittle her because of her age and gender. You use a good mixture of dialogue and internal battles to make everyone believable, yet different.
FranT03 FranT03 Feb 20, 2017
wow man this is too mach maaaaaaaan please maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan
                              Ok, stop, this is good