Murderer of the Night

Murderer of the Night

1.2K Reads 79 Votes 3 Part Story
S.J. Rhodes By Friday13thx3 Completed

I kill people, and yes i know you think i am crazy but i am not. Just read the story and you will find out eventually.

trinityfire trinityfire Jul 23
Hey if anyone has time, it would be appreciated if anyone could check put my story. All readers are wwlxoned and appreciated!
Thatonehotbitch Thatonehotbitch Nov 04, 2012
There are a lot of sentences that start with she, so you should try and avoid that. Also there are a lot of conversations in this one little section and it kind of overwhelms the eye, but other than that it's good!
AStoryToBeTold AStoryToBeTold Nov 03, 2012
This is brilliant; it grabs your attention straight away - no messing about. You constantly create a sense of foreboding, which is good. You asked for constructive criticism, and the only thing is that maybe you could vary the sentence length a little bit? Apart from that, it's great :-)
Friday13thx3 Friday13thx3 Apr 03, 2012
@smaoineamh yea, i thought that i should expand it so i wrote a sequel to this because of popular demand and am currently in the process of writing it, and am close to the end..
- - Feb 24, 2012
This kind of makes me wonder about how some authors really are lol. Good plot to it, though.(:
Aspiredtocreate Aspiredtocreate Feb 22, 2012
Good Story!! The plot is very intriguing....can't wait to read what happens next...but yes like everyone I think adding little physical details, names will help make the story make more interesting...
                              
                              P.S. Thanks for voting so quickly, do read the story if you have time & send me a feedback!