The Dark Road to Dathelia

The Dark Road to Dathelia

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destiny By destiny4bieber Updated May 02, 2011

michael dylan used to be a normal teenage boy. he was good looking when he was human, now hes drop dead gorgeous that he is a vampire. krone is after him to kill what michael was reborn as, the king of dathelia. beth is always trying to jump him, matt is always down his throat, and his emotions are always a mess. what will he decide?

BrooklynTuesday BrooklynTuesday Dec 11, 2010
@destiny4bieber awesome :) and please don't take anything i say offensively, i only say it to help you :) and besides, there's probably heaps of people that think it's fine, and i should shut my mouth because i don't know what i'm talking about :)
destiny4bieber destiny4bieber Dec 10, 2010
@BrookeJade I agree lol this was the first chapter i wrote then i went back and made it the second chapter... I really appreciate your critisizm (however u spell that haha) and i'll see what i can do to fix it up ;)
destiny4bieber destiny4bieber Dec 10, 2010
@BrookeJade lol idk :P i just thought it would be interesting way to start a story haha :P
                              Thanks ;) 
BrooklynTuesday BrooklynTuesday Dec 10, 2010
i think you should add more detail to this, i dunno it just feels like there's something missing, don't be afraid to make the chapters longer, your readers will like it better that way.
BrooklynTuesday BrooklynTuesday Dec 10, 2010
Justin Bieber? really? i'm sorry but EWWW!!!! he can't sing!!! *sighs* oh well, nice story btw :)