what would you do if you were in love with your best friends brother?
This is good, but your missing alot of punctuation here. Just be wary of that. C:
Also when switching points of veiw, let us know for example
blah blah blah
you need to use more details. Also like memoires said, Dont use text talk.
The plot seems nice, but you should totally take an editor...
@Up_in_the_sky the problem is i dont have a computer so its all hand writen and when i get a chance to i put it up here so its pretty hard lol. i will try harded and thanks
If you need an editor, I would be more than happy to edit your stories for you...That way it may be easier to understand. :)