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THE VISITOR (The Best Of Watties 2017)

THE VISITOR (The Best Of Watties 2017)

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Tony Harmsworth By TonyHarmsworth Completed

Specialist astronaut Evelyn Slater encounters a badly damaged, ancient alien artefact on the first ever space junk elimination mission.
           
  A security clampdown is imposed by the USA, Russian and European governments. Evelyn leads a team of hand-picked scientists who make amazing discoveries within the alien device.
          
  Secrecy is impossible to maintain and she becomes embroiled in international politics as the existence of the Visitor is announced to the world.
          
  (C) 2017 Tony Harmsworth - All Rights Reserved. For the avoidance of doubt, anyone using this storyline, characters or copying prose or dialogue without written permission, will be prosecuted under international intellectual property laws. If you wish to write fan fiction based on the characters or invented worlds in my work, please seek written permission.

Once gain, effective descriptive text. I see it in my mind's eye. Well-written.
Great cliff hanger. Nice work on your opening chapter. Kudos!
kemorgan65 kemorgan65 Mar 09
First sentence is somewhat ambiguous:
                              It COULD mean that the first stage of your mission is to find and eliminate junk...
- - Dec 20, 2016
Good opening. I liked the way you captured different nationalities without it being overly forceful. I also like the feeling of stepping into the shoes of this outsider and getting that sense of awe and wonderment of the space journey.
twitchingmean4 twitchingmean4 Aug 04, 2016
Oh sorry it was when yuri was asking permission to come aboard it seemed more like a statement to a question but it said she asked so yeah it was in chapter one I'm not sure how else to tell you where it is. My apologies
DaddyEvil DaddyEvil Jan 08
I'm glad you dug in your heels and kept the original beginning to your story.
                              Whether it adds substantially to your story is beside the point. It DOES add to the reader's enjoyment!