The God's Call You

The God's Call You

1.2K Reads 17 Votes 4 Part Story
LadyNikon By LadyNikon Updated Dec 02, 2010

A Story about a girl who can't catch guys attention around her to save her life. But after what happens when she goes on a field trip? Everything changes and then some.

karebear17 karebear17 Dec 09, 2010
okay it moves a bit fast. it might be better to go into detail and explain how things happened and what your surroundings look like. if you need more inspiration you can personal message me and we can talk. i love your idea though so keep up the good work.
karebear17 karebear17 Dec 09, 2010
okie dokie i like the idea but the choppiness of the paragraphs is a teensy bit tiring to read. however the idea of your story is still preeetty good so im gonna fan and vote for you