Where Did I Go Wrong: The Series

Where Did I Go Wrong: The Series

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Daveon Williams By monsterguy17 Completed

At the age of 40, Wagner was kicked out of the military for cruel and unusual punishment. He was then put on a wanted list and was forced to run from The League. Wagner tries to trust his family but they betray him. He finally escapes them after 2 years. As Wagner wakes up one morning a letter is at his door saying that The League has his daughter. He makes it his mission to set her free at any cost.

SparkleSavannah SparkleSavannah Nov 05, 2011
Interesting beginning.  Go back through it and format the paragraphs so the reader can associate the change in subject.  Nice start! ;)