Picking Up The Pieces (#Wattys2016)

Picking Up The Pieces (#Wattys2016)

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Olivia Raine By oliviaraine Completed

After hearing the tragic news, Caleb Adams drops everything and rushes home to see his childhood best friend, Sara Gardner.  He never told her how he really felt about her, and all the old emotions come rushing back the moment he lays eyes on her again. However, there is more to their falling-out than he realizes, and digging up the past may hurt her even more. 
    
  Though Sara denies it, the grown-up Caleb is more than she can handle. Her life changed ten years ago when he walked away, and now he is back. She tries to hold him at an arms' length, but how can she keep her heart safe when he is putting her back together?

DasVii DasVii Aug 11, 2016
Very interesting start into an emotional story. At least that's the feeling  I have right now. I sense some foreshadowing :D There are some sentences or formulations I'd personally cut for a better flow, but to put it in a nutshell: Good job! I'm curious to read the next chapters!
leannew94 leannew94 Jul 12, 2016
Wow, this is a really wonderful opening chapter. Your descriptions are well written and the use of your words really add to the mood that needs to be set. I'm hooked already :)
KateAmedeo KateAmedeo Jul 09, 2016
'Also' is repeated twice in the first paragraph (one almost after the other)
JasminAMiller JasminAMiller Jul 14, 2016
Great first chapter!!!! I really enjoyed it. Your writing flows very well! 😍
Beansp4 Beansp4 Jan 08
Woah my name's Sarah and I know a family with the last name "Mahoney"
Beansp4 Beansp4 Jan 10
lol thanks for the message! I can't get back to you on my board but no problem!