Emerald: Dendro

Emerald: Dendro

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Jinn Tiole By jinnis Completed

The planet seems perfect for human settlement: lots of water, an earth-like atmosphere and a lush vegetation. Mil plunges into the study of the biosphere with professional enthusiasm. But one detail slips her attention...

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Tina4106 Tina4106 Jun 21
Already I can't wait to see where this is going. Great job on the translation so far.
Tina4106 Tina4106 Jun 21
I think it is admirable that you painstakingly translated this into English so more people can enjoy it. I'm going to start reading now.
lhansenauthor lhansenauthor Apr 12, 2016
'tears rather unceremoniously'. Rather is vague and unceremoniously an adverb. Try to use what is called a 'strong verb' instead, it will make your language more impactful. 
                              jolts? throws her out of her dream? Something like that.
lhansenauthor lhansenauthor Apr 12, 2016
You#re not the first one to translate a novel into English. There are a couple of very successful language authors on WP who are sharing their works. I was actually thinking of working the other way round. to translate 'In My Attic' into German once I'm done. First, I have to write it.
microwheels microwheels Jan 23, 2017
The colloquial expression is "not by a long shot."  Use that phrase instead of "not by a long way" when Mill is ruminating on how she feels about Dray.
lhansenauthor lhansenauthor Apr 12, 2016
Whoa. POV slip. From Mil to Dray in one sentence flat. 'She knows that Mil can and will....' 
                              that is not such a good idea..