15.7K Reads 385 Votes 21 Part Story
A By Barneyatemyface Updated Nov 24, 2011

"No one believed one very frustrated six year old about the headless Barbie doll. All I got was an earful about how bad a brother I was and the next day I didn't get a piece of fudge for breakfast.  Because I was such a bad boy, making excuses to cover up after myself. My sister never seemed to forget about her lame Barbie doll, she has been whining about it for about ten years now.

But I know. And they won't let me go."

There's something sinister or maybe just wrong with Anthony's little 'ability'. Toys have been coming alive around him ever since he could remember. He hadn't actually told anyone about - except that one time, and look how that had turned out - no fudge for breakfast. Was he crazy? Possibly, but he didn't exactly have a family history of insanity. He doesn't know why, or how it first started and he was fine with that. Safe, cautious, professional, smart, nice, - that's who he was, until a certain feisty and annoying little doll shows up as his birthday present, asking, no, demanding that he help her. Dolls weren't supposed to talk or they were supposed to be toylike and nice- like in Toystory, they weren't supposed to come outright and claim to have once been alive, and he wasn't supposed to believe that or get too attached to a certain doll. Just when Anthony though his term break was going to be spent at another boring desk jobs things take a dive for the exact opposite of boring.

  • creepy
  • doll
jenniferxxyz jenniferxxyz Apr 15, 2014
I liked how you were able to portray the fathers cruelty towards his son Richard. His fathers sudden shift from calm and sweet to cruel and hateful really amplified his character. I also like how you layered the prologue. Voted.
AiBonbon AiBonbon Nov 23, 2011
Aw so sad :c poor Richard. I like the simile of a moth and the flame. :) I'll read more chapters.
-1812- -1812- Nov 19, 2011
cool opening, but I would add a bit more intrigue to it. Voted~!
DanLeMes DanLeMes Oct 06, 2011
Well, this is different. I like how you have chosen an original plot, and I found it very capturing, especially since when I was smaller I used to think that toys came alive ;) VERY good
hollymax101 hollymax101 Jul 07, 2011
That sounds so, mysterious! I'm definitely continuing this! So far, I only find one erro, so keep it up!
Barneyatemyface Barneyatemyface Feb 27, 2011
@AAGirl101 Okay! Lol, don't worry, I'm pretty hard on myself as a critic a well- i don't get offended by criticism I asked for anyway.