Their Soft Spot

Their Soft Spot

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owlhunter18 By owlhunter18 Updated Jul 01

Lilly was a sweet girl small and petite no way of defending her self and was very trusting with everybody. Lilly's parents were always away and never in her life leaving her to defend on her own she was a born submissive.

Kyle and Brandon on the other hand were  dominate and out grew full men at the age of 15 they we rich and very powerful  taking orders from no one and they had no soft spot excepted for her.

ILOVETOP1 ILOVETOP1 May 31
Grammar and spelling really needs to be fixed. Good story so far though
shadowfores shadowfores Jun 08
90 pounds is very unhealthy for a sixteen year old. The average weight for a fifth grader is 103 lbs. And they are 10-11 years old.
LeeCatie LeeCatie Mar 13
Wait, winter? I thought she was getting flowers for her garden? Why would she be getting flowers and gardening in the winter?
Nenerh1 Nenerh1 May 15, 2016
It sounds interesting, but can I suggest fixing the grammar mistakes? They are a bit confusing...
MONSTERanime MONSTERanime Jun 07, 2016
Love the story line the grammar needs major editing, I think that ba grammar makes the readers confused so it  would also get you more readers if you fixed the grammar pls
NovaLuna21 NovaLuna21 Sep 08, 2016
So far so good. However, like some of the other comments say, you really need to check your spelling and grammar before you post so that it is easier for your readers to follow. :)