This is a Storm and Silence fan fiction which will consist of mainly one shots.
ITEOTS one shots also included.
All of the characters belong to the amazing @RobThier
I feel like Lily wouldn't throw a fit and she would make him give her the day off instead of giving up so easily
Grammar Nazis unite!
Ok so there are a few commas missing, Mr Ambrose doesn't sound like himself - you're almost there, but some fine tuning is required.
Lilly is pretty good. 😊
I didn't sugarcoat anything, ok? Just told u what I thought might be improved.
Because I'm a grammar nazi too.
Ahhh!!!!! The feels.........wish mr.ambrose was mine. ;-);-);-)
Awesome chapter bro..!!!
Cute stubbornness! Maybe Ambrose will sneak too for chocolate someday. Hehe!
One thing I REALLY noticed was that you changed the point of view halfway through. Great other than that!
Here are my editing suggestions:
No, It does not! - Don't put a capital letter on the word 'it'
other than that, perf :)