My Luck Is So Awesome It Hurts

My Luck Is So Awesome It Hurts

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A By Barneyatemyface Updated Nov 28, 2010

yadayadayada and until on Thursday night, when I 
heard voices while walking past room 113.No one had checked into the room this summer or any summer, but as far as I knew, it was very far from being haunted. As quietly as possible, I managed to pry a few inches of the door open. I felt my eyes widen, in shock, sort of, because Jason and Grace were sitting in a circle of lit white candles and at the centre of the circle was a man wearing clothes that may have been totally in style, maybe during the French Renaissance.
And his feet weren’t touching the floor.
Jason and Grace were chanting in some strange language, but half way through, the man turned towards me, and so did Grace and Jason.
Busted.
That’s when I saw the fake oriental blue and while china vase.

Barneyatemyface Barneyatemyface Nov 28, 2010
@Supernaturalchic33 Oh yeah, I realized that as well, its to harried - i wrote this when i was much younger.. I'll look it over and edit it , thank you so much :D
Barneyatemyface Barneyatemyface Nov 28, 2010
@xwriterwannabex  Alright. Thanks, i'll try to improve on it according to your comments. Really appreciate it :)
Supernaturalchic33 Supernaturalchic33 Nov 27, 2010
This is pretty good, i see a great start. Just slow down and add more details to it. Explain alittle more in detail is what im trying to say. other than that its good