What Did I Get Myself Into?

What Did I Get Myself Into?

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Stephanie By FotherMucker Updated Mar 23, 2012

Dayvoco didn't know if he could continue in his family's footsteps. Being a vicious killers and playing their cruel jokes. With his leader Mathias keeping an eye on him, He couldn't afford to show sympathy for the human race. That was until he met little Newell. He couldn't kill a baby. What heartless souls could kill a baby? Well thats what his family expected him to do. Instead he ranaway with Newell and went into hiding. Afraid what his family would do if he was found he kept moving. Was he safe after years of not seeing or hearing anything? How was his life to change?  Could a vampire raise a baby? What did Dayvoco get himself into?

    FotherMucker FotherMucker Jul 19, 2015
    @sackgirl200 it was obviously suppose to say by the b and m are close to each other. "My" doesn't even make sense. It says right in the very beginning that the story needs major editing and to please bare with me.
    sackgirl200 sackgirl200 Jul 19, 2015
    instead of saying what u said u should have said   this  by the city
    live_yuh_life live_yuh_life Apr 05, 2012
    Okay, so I'm thinking that maybe you should put the whole editing and copyright things in a different chapter...Like, make a chapter before this one and put it in there with just these things in it...But other than that, it's good.
    FotherMucker FotherMucker Dec 22, 2011
    @Bluefrog123 
                                  Sorry for late reply thanks! I might check it out, about the book cover. I do like this one...But I could give you other ideas and see if I like yours better
    kimathy kimathy Jul 18, 2011
    There are a couple of grammatical errors, "Your" instead of "You're, and such. Plus you use both present and past tense in sentences, which makes it hard to understand. But I like it!
    FotherMucker FotherMucker Jul 03, 2011
    @peacesign1 
                                  thanks that really means a lot to me. I plan on editing everything, but I do agree my sentence structures aren't the best. Thanks I love constructive criticism