Milani Jensen's Story

Milani Jensen's Story

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scarletdancer27 By scarletdancer27 Updated Nov 26, 2010

Milani Jensen is a 17 yr old girl from England who's world is turned upside down when she goes on an exchange program to Australia.

lucky97 lucky97 Jan 15, 2011
Good:) now for my constructive criticism... Not much! Just add descriptions to pull the action together so it will b very enjoyable and I also agree with littlemegraciee anyways voted
Munni101 Munni101 Nov 27, 2010
This was a sweet little story, but you should have better spacing with the dialogue xD
                              Other than that, it was good! You should try and make it into a proper, novel sized book! That would be really interesting!
LittleMeGraciee LittleMeGraciee Nov 27, 2010
I really liked reading this, although as Booperkat pointed out, there are mistakes with the spacing. 
                              I also thought that it was a bit fast paced. 
                              Other than that I loved it :)
scarletdancer27 scarletdancer27 Nov 27, 2010
@Booperkat Thanks for reading it and for the review :) Oh I didn't even see that when I was editing. I do plan on continuing it but I wanted to end it so that it can be read by itself or as one part of the big story. I'll keep working at it. Thanks again :)