Impurity

Impurity

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sasukechar2 By sasukechar2 Updated Dec 06, 2010

Four years ago, the Almighty sent all angels except for eleven year old Axel, and his mentor Chief away from the Realm of the Pure. For no reason at all, they were sent away; leaving Axel very confused, and angry. He questioned why ; why would his creator betray him? What had his fellow angels done wrong? What is wrong with the Almighty, to just send them away without reason? Those questions—for reasons unknown—are never answered, leaving him in the dark, trying to figure things out for himself. 
More than his confusion of the fall of the angels; Axel is traumatized from the loss of his dear twin sister Athena. He longs to see her, hold her, and protect her from the dangers of her new home. But sadly he can't, for he's in the Realm, while she's on Earth...As the anniversary of her fall draws closer, Axel begins to hallucinate her; hearing her voice, and seeing her images. He desperately wants to get better, but the question is, can he do it?

RosemarieHathaway RosemarieHathaway Nov 26, 2010
By the way, it doesn't read like a prologue.
                              Maybe the flashback itself would work, but this feels more like a first chapter, if you get what i mean.