Footprints On The Heart

Footprints On The Heart

381 Reads 7 Votes 4 Part Story
write4yourright By write4yourright Updated Dec 09, 2010

Aureliana Hook, or Ari as she prefers people to call her, has worked in her mother's daycare in Clover since she was old enough to and has been homeschooled the whole time. Because of this, the only people she's around are the kids at the daycare and her coworkers, and she does not intend on making any friends her age.

Salomon is the only boy in a family of seven. His mother died during childbirth of his last sister three years ago, and his father has been working hard to support everyone. His father's work moves the whole family to the itty bitty town of Clover, and Salomon is anxious to meet everybody there.

write4yourright write4yourright Nov 25, 2010
@Novel19 Thanks, I appreciate your response :) Mhm, the second chapter has a good bit more dialogue in it, so I hope that'll help.
Novel19 Novel19 Nov 25, 2010
Okie Dokie! That was alright but hmm..I cant put my finger on it. But over all that was very nice. It needs more spice to it. Add flair, add attraction and more talking. This was only the first part so the seocnd part should be more intresting! I did enjoy this though. Keep it up (:
                              -Novel19