The Gift

The Gift

658 Reads 9 Votes 3 Part Story
Razhaa By Razhaa Updated Dec 18, 2010

Kaesi Fortes is telling the story thats forbidden to be told. The story of how her and her brother Caelon, brother are taken away from their family and sent to a secret government facility for what the government claim to be for "potential children." Its for potential children alright but a different kinda potential. It's kids with potential to have "the gift" everybody's been talking about. Kaesi and Caelon don't know where they are and they hardly see each other but they've come up with a plan to take down this facility and save themselves while their at it. Will theyy escape, safely? How long will it take? Onlyy Kaesi can tell.

Razhaa Razhaa Nov 25, 2010
I changed it .. I think it was a run-on before but its a conjunction now.
iBubblyGurl iBubblyGurl Nov 25, 2010
i like how this is going so far :) but the first sentence is a run-on so i think u should seperate, doing tht will also add some drama. i also like how u ended it with a cliff hanger. other than tht keep going!
Razhaa Razhaa Nov 25, 2010
Thanks, That would be alot of help. I'll add more later to kinda help you out a little more.
xwriterwannabex xwriterwannabex Nov 25, 2010
Okay. I'm thinking of a very non specific cover. You don't have much here for me to work with but I have something in mind. Which I will try if you like?