Empire of Ashes

Empire of Ashes

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Aellix By Aellix Updated a day ago

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Lyra is just one in thousands of captives in a war that has raged for generations. Her homeland has been invaded by an ambitious new king, and she has lost everything -- her farm, her family and her will to live. Enslaved and shackled, she is marched off to serve Temris Ragnyrsbane, a ruthless warlord in the pay of the enemy. But Temris is not all he seems to be, and with him Lyra finds a chance in a million of overthrowing the tyrant who ruined her whole life.

  • adventure
  • ashes
  • celtic
  • empire
  • escape
  • family
  • fantasy
  • featured
  • fiction
  • fight
  • fire
  • friend
  • grief
  • historical
  • horse
  • king
  • rebel
  • rebellion
  • romance
  • slave
  • uprising
  • war
  • warlord
  • wattpride
LoudJeneral LoudJeneral Sep 10, 2017
I like her clever strategy but doesnt "carcass" mean dead body?  Can it refer to an unconcius person? You could say something like the "prone form of the first guard" or something like that. I defer to your judgment.
KirstenKaitlinSetty KirstenKaitlinSetty Nov 20, 2018
This first line really just hooks you. I was instantly drawn in!
HassanTheAthenian HassanTheAthenian Dec 31, 2018
I like it. Good, strong start. I would suggest checking long sentences and paragraphs though.
I love this! Lyra is such a great character and i love your writing so far
aphroditedd aphroditedd Jan 03
I am so effing shook rn. This was AMAZING.....I couldn’t even comment till now because I was so into it...
WOW. just WOW. my science fantasy seems lame now... (Eloise Holle, id reeeeeeeaalyyyyyyyyyy love it if you read it? ive only completed the first chapter, still writing the 2nd)