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Beautiful Dancer

Beautiful Dancer

423 Reads 25 Votes 2 Part Story
Aissa By bronxnyc Completed

Spinning and turning,
Twisting and learning,
She's not one to hear the burning.
Another short poem i wrote on a whim. :)

HonestLyre HonestLyre Oct 07, 2014
I love the images! As she learns to dance and her love for it grows, everything around her crashes and burns. But she is the crown jewel for innocence. Art can take you away to the best of places.
MsChipmunk7 MsChipmunk7 Sep 30, 2014
I love both versions, but I like the feel of this one more. It gives a more personal tone to it. The first one is a bit impersonal. This one allows readers to relate to the dancer more. ♡ ♥ <3
MissAlice MissAlice Jul 04, 2013
This is a rather lovely poem, I absolutely love it :)  It flows wonderfully and has a lot of hidden emotion.  You have a gift!  I could see this becoming a classic.
MJLevitt MJLevitt Apr 07, 2013
They are both excellent, I can't say which I like more because they are both wonderful. V
MJLevitt MJLevitt Apr 07, 2013
Beautiful poem, love the flow to it and the juxtaposition of something as beautiful as dancing to something as horrible as war. V
bronxnyc bronxnyc Mar 03, 2012
@hyperjudgement Thank you. :) I wrote this one a little while ago, so i fixed some of the wording in the second part, but i'll go see if there's anymore i can fix. ^_^ Thank you again.