Bipolar | Peter Quill [#WATTYS2016]

Bipolar | Peter Quill [#WATTYS2016]

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ᴍᴀɴɢᴏ ᴅᴜᴍ-ᴅᴜᴍs By -voidGecko Completed

"Cross her, and she'll kill you. She'll poison you, rip out your spine, shoot you, suffocate you, or decapitate you."

Luna is what Peter Quill calls, "An ice-cold bipolar felecia." 
Peter is what Luna calls, "A stupid, but adorable, jackass."

   Luna and Peter were both from Terra. Blah, blah, blah, they both end up in space, then end up in space jail and they're the only two people who look normal. Normal as in tan skin and know what actual music is.

   They meet me each other, if you count meet as Luna trying to kill Peter, then yes, they did meet and got along well. Kinda. Who knew that being in prison with each other would have change their entire lives forever?

Published: March 26, 2016
Completed: April 1, 2016
Edited: December 6, 2016

Rated mature: for use of profanity

- - Mar 28
Wow. This must be a pivotal moment for your character, try slowing down and describe the men.
- - Mar 28
Overall, I liked the action-packed start to your book. My one advice? Slow down so you can describe the setting and all the events that take place. What does the place feel like? Smell like? Look like? Sound like? Taste if you can. Nice job.
- - Mar 28
Hmm. Try a different word than thingy. It seems a bit out of place. Just say cliff.
- - Mar 28
I love the description, but try slowing down. You're giving readers a lot of seats old and it's hard to focus on all of them. Describe one of the actions and then choose the ones that fit best with it, some details are better left out.
- - Mar 28
Describe the tumbling motion. How does Starlord feel physically? Answer in your writing.