Bella finds out she is Alpha Sam's sister.
Need quptation marks when someone is talking. And clearer explanations
There are a lot of run on sentences but other then that its good
Needs better punctuation and details other than that its really good
How you should have put it was
"And on monday, I have a surprise for you"
Are you faqing kidding me ?! best dad in the world?! Yeah sure stop being delusional!
There should really be quotation marks. And clearer explanations