The Prince And The Swan

The Prince And The Swan

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Elize-Remi By Elize-Remi Updated 2 days ago

A re-telling of Swan Lake
(I actually do not know much about Swan Lake, this is based on my limited knowledge)

Thaiya never sees anyone other than her family, thanks to a family curse that leaves her a Swan during the day, and a human at night. She begins to realize that she doesn't really fit into the role of human... or the role of swan. What is she willing to do to fit in somewhere?

Prince Derek has, for the most part been happy with his life at Court. Hoever, that changes the day he meets his betrothed. Not happy. He doesn't think he could ever love her, so he leaves.

Two people, very different lives, meet one day. What happens when Derek begins to feel something for this stranger? Will he choose duty to the crown, or his heart?



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Oh my gosh. I love this story already! It's such a unique twist to the original. :)
Comma after Lyana, otherwise it sounds like Lyana is the one cocking her head.
Aww, this is so sad. :(
                              
                              But I love the imagery at the beginning. I agree with Cross-Warrior about the "grew up" part. Maybe leaving out the "up" entirely might do the trick.
Since you say Mrs. with the period, I'm guessing you use American English. In which case, it's "Thaiya." and not "Thaiya".  I think 😂
No comma after almost gone since the part after the and is not a complete sentence or part of a 3+ list. Also, I don't know if I've said it later, but I don't think Lady should be capitalized with how it's being used. Could be wrong.
I think you forgot a quotation mark after the hyphen where Thaiya interrupts. Also, that after the hyphen should be a new sentence.