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You have no idea how much this annoys me. Ned was not a king. The only king at the time was Robert. Sorry to be rude, but seriously, facts need to be checked. He was the Lord of Winterfell and the warden of the North, that's all. Not a king.
I don't like making suggestions, but the Starks are not royalty. So, Ned Stark should not be called a king, but a lord. Sorry if this bothers you.
Dear Jon and Robb, he's just a child, say easier words :D Ellyn seems to love Jon or Robb. And I think she'll choose one of the two brothers.
I'll keep reading, cos I love Jon and don't really like Ygritte :P But here's an author tip for the future: try using synonyms, cos it's confusing when the same word apprears in a sentence a few times ;) Just from the good heart :) Anyway, this starts quite nice :)
Cause i dont like Ygritte and i think i can do a better love story for him
But..... John had ygritte in book 3 so why a fanfic about him falling in love? Sorry, I'm on book 4 & I'm just wondering