Dying Embers

Dying Embers

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Phantom_Engima By anupamarc Completed

First of the Phantom Enigma series....The truth that has been kept a secret for thousands of years is about to explode. Zoe is about to embark on a journey that will unravel something so large - it will shake the whole world and question everything we know and believe in.

Third paragraph needs to end in a period instead of a comma.
Fantastic opening. It's gripping and leaves a million questions to be answered.
CliffJonesJr CliffJonesJr 2 days ago
I kind of wish I knew more about these people. You think you might come back to them? Kidding, but for real I had a bit of trouble picturing who was saying what with just the pronouns. All very secretive at this point, I suppose.
AshDkay AshDkay Jun 16
Love this idea, it brings a feel of what the day would look like wihout throwing a butch of random description everywhere.
happygirl1 happygirl1 Jun 17
Very original!
                              Straight into the action, with lots of scenarios to ponder for us readers!
                              It definitely leaves one wanting to learn more!
Your description of story was intriguing. "Question everything we know and believe in." This sort of sounds like one of stories. Is it sad I'm intrigued by stories that sound sort of like my own? Hahaha. 
                              
                              Good start. The mystery has begun....