Dying Embers

Dying Embers

7.7K Reads 727 Votes 55 Part Story
Phantom_Engima By anupamarc Completed

Completed - First of the Phantom Enigma series - The truth that has been kept a secret for thousands of years is about to explode. Zoe, along with best friend Zachary, and Josh, an intriguing internet stranger are about to embark on a journey that will unravel something so large - it will shake the whole world and question everything we know and believe in.

Vroomfondel42 Vroomfondel42 Jul 16, 2016
Fantastic opening. It's gripping and leaves a million questions to be answered.
CliffJonesJr CliffJonesJr Dec 08, 2016
I kind of wish I knew more about these people. You think you might come back to them? Kidding, but for real I had a bit of trouble picturing who was saying what with just the pronouns. All very secretive at this point, I suppose.
ShaunEyles ShaunEyles Dec 20, 2016
I can feel her impatience. 
                              
                              I think the "several times" could go, and it would still make sense that the phone kept ringing.
AshDkay AshDkay Jun 16, 2016
Love this idea, it brings a feel of what the day would look like wihout throwing a butch of random description everywhere.
happygirl1 happygirl1 Jun 17, 2016
Very original!
                              Straight into the action, with lots of scenarios to ponder for us readers!
                              It definitely leaves one wanting to learn more!
ShaunEyles ShaunEyles Dec 20, 2016
Like the bare feet description. Makes me think that she's going to be unique, a bit out of the box.