Because I Love You

Because I Love You

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Jedediah B. By Aaron_Ledgers Updated 5 days ago

(Highest Ranking - #8 in Fantasy!!!!! ❤) -- Xaphile Heseroph wasn't exactly the best at being the boy-next-door. He was pessimistic, clumsy, insecure, and highly antisocial - the complete opposite of his girlfriend, a bubbly nerd named Ella. But like Yin and Yang, the two of them were inseparable. At least, until the day Ella died.

Blinded by grief, Phil took his own life, but instead of finding his much-expected peace in the afterlife, he somehow awakens in a parallel world called Atlas as a different and almost monstrous-looking version of himself.

Trapped in the kingdom of Aerika, a bizarre place chock full of things like elves, orcs, demons, faeries, squirrel-riding women, a tyrannical government, and everything else under the sun, he finds himself very confused and depressed. But before he can begin to make sense of anything, he's captured and viciously brutalized by a ruthless girl who looks and sounds exactly like his late girlfriend.

Is this his own, personal hell?

Or is it a second chance?

And if it is a second chance... does he even want to take it?

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I'm confused as to what is gained by using ellipses over commas.
This is so intriguing and you've left me hungry for more! Great start, man!
Andicook Andicook Feb 10
Great prologue. It's hooked me immediately. Very dramatic. I'm not sure why it's in italics, though.
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                              I actually found this quite enjoyable and overall I managed every little detail, from the tree falling, to the rocks that fell from the cliff. Now this is a prologue that makes you want to know what happened and pulls you into the story.
Wow, this was a great beginning! I feel bad for the poor girl. There are no mistakes in grammar or spelling, and I loved how you described everything. Well done! 😀
As you know I've loved this book from the beginning also it's nice to see the new prologue. It still has the same power as the original but also its own extra flare.