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Demetri's story

Demetri's story

93.4K Reads 1.5K Votes 27 Part Story
Emilie By vampireowl Completed

Emily has just turned 20 and she and all her friends are going on a trip that will literally CHANGE their lives!

YarinMaximoff YarinMaximoff Aug 11, 2016
Demetri is me turning 16 XD 
                              *half-aßed fake excitement* Yay......whoopdie-fricking-doo *continues on with life*
writing_is_my_love writing_is_my_love Oct 23, 2011
@vampireowl Your welcome, and I will. later. Working on music for one of my stories right now.
vampireowl vampireowl Oct 23, 2011
@AndySixxLover123 thanks its great advice and please comment more and read on. thank u :) <3 xxxxxxxxx
writing_is_my_love writing_is_my_love Oct 23, 2011
You write well. You need to work on your dialogue. For one thing you need double quotations ( " ) not singular ones. Also, you need endmark for dialogue. And I suggest if you have the person have visions, put them in italics. But, all in all, you did very well.
vampireowl vampireowl Oct 23, 2011
please comment i want to know what you think! please don't keep me in suspence. :) xxx