My life with the singer  (Not edited version)

My life with the singer (Not edited version)

6K Reads 91 Votes 11 Part Story
Dani and Pao By lovesarcasm Updated Nov 27, 2011

Emily Anderson is just another girl trying to cope with life, her dad works 18 hours a day, her sister went to live in Tennesse and her mother died years ago, she doesn´t have any friends, all of them abandoned her after her mothers death. But now her life has a brighter note to it since after all those years of being alone, releaving memories and moping around one of the most famous singers in the world and one of her favorites is going to her school and he is offering her the life that she always wanted, one with love and happiness... the two most important things she lost when her mother`s heart stopped beating.

ESYLuc ESYLuc Nov 01, 2011
Hmmm
                              Check your punctuation and double space the dialogue 
                              Maybe focus a bit more description
                              - Emile
daawesomeme daawesomeme Oct 07, 2011
I love this story!!! did i already comment about that??
                               oops :)
lovesarcasm lovesarcasm Aug 18, 2011
@chloelou13 Thanks for reading.. and yeah I´ll try not to repeat the words XL :)
chloelou13 chloelou13 Aug 18, 2011
great first chapter, Try not to use then all the time but a part from that amazing!
                              -Chloelou13
                               <3
CollinGraham95 CollinGraham95 Aug 16, 2011
really great start! Ill keep on reading. Seems promising. (:
lovesarcasm lovesarcasm Jul 03, 2011
@ColorOfLove thank u.. :) it means a lot hope I don´t desapoint :)